Camp writing

CAMP DESCRIPTION

Achievement Objectives:

Purposes and audiences

• Show a developing understanding of how to shape texts for different purposes and audiences.
• INDICATORS:
• –  constructs texts that show a growing awareness of purpose and audience through careful choice of content, language, and text form;
• –  conveys and sustains personal voice where appropriate.

Ideas

Select, form, and communicate ideas on a range of topics.

INDICATORS:

• –  forms and expresses ideas and information with increased clarity, drawing on a range of sources;
• –  adds or changes details and comments to support ideas, showing some selectivity in the process;
• –  ideas suggest awareness of a range of dimensions or viewpoints.

Language features

Use language features appropriately, showing a developing understanding of their effects.

• INDICATORS:
• –  uses oral, written, and visual language features to create meaning and effect and engage interest;
• –  uses a range of vocabulary to communicate meaning;
• –  demonstrates good understanding of all basic spelling patterns and sounds in written English;
• –  uses an increasing range of strategies to self-monitor and self-correct spelling;
• –  writes legibly, fluently, and with ease when creating texts;
• –  uses a range of text conventions, including most grammatical conventions, appropriately and with increasing accuracy.

Structure

• Show a developing understanding of text structures.
• INDICATORS:
• –  understands that the order and organisation of words, sentences, paragraphs, and images contribute to and affect text meaning;
• –  identifies a range of text forms and recognises some of their characteristics and conventions.
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Motivation:

• Write a description about one event/experience from camp.

Key outcomes:

• To hook the reader in with an interesting beginning
• A variety of sentence starters
• A variety of sentence lengths - simple/compound/complex
• Edit and rework
• Effective peer checking and feedback

My draft and editing:

Published writing:

As soon as I got told I was doing high ropes I jumped up and down in excitement trying to get rid of time so we could go earlier.Once we got their we put on our harness's and helmets.Then we went over all of the rules and how to belay which was good.
Once she asked for a helper I pushed my hand up faster than a lightning bolt Yay she picked me!As I started to walk across the wire their was adrenaline gushing through my chest.
Our team went to the giants ladder.It was really hard but Jackson and I didn't give up.He gave me a knee up then I would pull him up.HECK YEAH we made it to the to I felt like I was a giant looking down on everyone we high five and jumped up and down yelling I'm on top of the WORLD].we were lowered safely and as I was walking away I thought I wish I could come back here.


My reflection and next step:
Is next time to do more writing with more detail and use more complex sentences with a lot of good descriptive words.